Already May

A rebel at four, an outlier
Not fitting the mean
Nor mode nor median
Your deviation was not standard
Neither your error

Buyer’s remorse does little
What gains from losses?
Breathe, move, believe
That is the point
Already May and
You have hardly lived



  1. in the first stanza the reader finds metaphors linking the description of a young person’s life to mathematical expressions of divergence. the temperature of this stanza is chilly, but the metaphors are
    effective. the second stanza has a warmer, more personal tone, leading to “Breathe, move, believe/ That is the point/ Already May and/ You have hardly lived” which is hopeful. it is so easy to fall into cliche’ when expressing hope, but you have avoided the trap. the cadence of these lines also works well.

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